My Hometown

Jakarta is a metropolitan city. Besides as the capital city of Indonesia, Jakarta is also as a economic centre. Certainly have many problems, such as traffic, unemployment, and the latest is flood. (Good points and you should develop these in your paragraphs)

Most people come to Jakarta bring much beautiful dreams like, richness and good occupation for their life. The result of this condition is make Jakarta more crowded. Flood will happen if rainy season is coming cause the people throw garbage anywhere. So this is our job as a University student to find the solution of this problem. (should be about traffic)

In weekdays, Jakarta is a busy town. At 07.00 AM and 05.00 PM, in the whole Jakarta always have a traffic problem. Besides that, Jakarta is also have many mall. Most people went to the mall just for spend the weekend or to buy their needs.(What is your point?)

Although Jakarta is a crowded city, in Jakarta we can find many recreation place, such as ancol, sea world, TMII and ragunan zoo. In sea world, we can see the biggest aquarium in south east asia. Every year, sea world usually held event in christmas day, new year and imlek day.(You should elaborate more with real examples)

I really love my hometown, cause we can find everything in there. We can find our needs or to spend the weekwend to do activity, such as sport in senayan or just having fun in recreation place.