Jakarta, Big and Beauty

Jakarta is a big and beautiful city. What makes it beautiful are its skyscrapers, buildings and transportation.
Skyscrapers in Jakarta have many kinds of design. There is a skyscraper which on the top of the building has a ship design, the skyscrapers name is Wisma 46. Another building that has an unique design is Garda Oto’s building. Its unique design lies within the Garda Oto’s big logo in the front windows of the building.
Bank Indonesia’s buildings are unique too. Most importantly is its mosque. It has a good design and look like an expensive building, although its ornaments are bought not from the famous company, they were bought from a little shop beside the road.
Transportation in Jakarta is going better. Even though traffic jams are everywhere, it will be reduce by the time being, because Jakarta’s Government has made some moves. Their first is Busway. Busway is a bus that made for public transportation and had its own track, so there won’t be anything that will block the way. There will be 13 corridors of Busway, only 4 that already finished, the rest are still in progress.
Jakarta’s Government second move is building a Monorail. Monorail is a little train that the rails are upside the main road. Monorail is not finished yet, the Jakarta’s Government predicted that Monorail will be finished in the year of 2011.
People in Jakarta Would prefer to take the Monorail or the Busway than to ride their own vehicle. So, there won’t be any traffic jam in Jakarta.

Good, but you need to focus on certain aspects of Jakarta and give more examples and details.