Jakarta, the good and the bad side

As metropolitan cities, Jakarta tries to satisfy the citizen and foreigner by offering various places, programs and activities. Jakarta has many places to stop, buy something, do recreation, or just look around. Jakarta has a recreation centers, such as Ragunan zoo, Thousand islands, TMII, Ancol, museums, monuments and many more. For people that come to Jakarta for shopping, Jakarta has a lot of shopping centers. You can choose things that you want to buy from the cheapest one -such as in Kota, mangga dua and tanah abang- until the expensive one –at the big shopping malls. (you have to define to stop, buy something, do recreation, or just look around and choose things)

Jakarta also spoils its citizens and tourists (from inside and outside Indonesia) with many kinds of pleasure. Jakarta offers many kinds of foods and drinks that you can get it from the cafes and restaurants in Jakarta. You can find traditional foods: Sumatrans foods, Javanese foods, Balinese foods etc, or you also can find international foods: Chinese foods, Japanese foods, Americans foods etc. If you want to stay in Jakarta for several days, Jakarta also offers stars hotels that have complete facilities. (What so special about Jakarta? You need to give real examples).

Even though Jakarta famous by “the metropolitan city”, it does not mean that Jakarta has no problems. Jakarta has population problems that become root of the problems in Jakarta. Many people from different places in Indonesia come to Jakarta to find a better life –that we called urbanization. Those people, who can not be handled by the government, just build their house in any empty spaces they found and do any jobs they want to do. They can do the positive things, such as open a new business; or just do the negative things –that can make more problems in Jakarta- such as begging at the intersection or doing some criminalities.(There are too many topics in this paragraph, there is no sense of unity and coherence)

Another problem –the latest ones- is flood. Almost every year, in the raining season, Jakarta suffers from flood; and for the worst flood is happening in this year. One of the reasons why Jakarta flood every year: because Jakarta is lower than Bogor. So, the water from the rain in Bogor will go to Jakarta. And another reason: because there are many people in Jakarta did not pay attention to the sanitary.(Sure, we know this, what specific perspective are you going to present?)

Well. Even though Jakarta has many kinds of problems, there still a lot of people who want to stay n live in Jakarta –including me. Not to make Jakarta looks worse, but to make Jakarta a better place to live. (I do not understand your point)