Bandung, Home Sweet Home

Who haven't heard about Bandung? I bet every people in Indonesia have heard about Bandung. Bandung is the capital city of West Java. The weather is very cool and the environment is very clean. The citizen, whose many of them are sundanesse, are very nice and kind. At here, people welcome you very much. (Your topic sentence is not clear.)

Lately, Bandung is known as " city of shop ". Many factory outlets mushrooming almost on every main road such as Dago Street and Setiabudi Street. So don't be surprised if you go to Bandung on weekend, the city will be look very crowded because many people from other city such as Jakarta and Bogor come abroad to Bandung to go shopping, buying things such as clothes, pants and jewellery. People like shopping here because the price is cheap. (Your topic sentence is not clear.)

Besides the factory outlets, Bandung also have malls like Bandung Super Mall, Paris Van Java, CiWalk and many more. Even the size of Bandung's mall are not as big as other city's mall, Bandung's malls are a very cozzy place. It's not too big like Pondok Indah Mall at Jakarta but also not too small. Bandung is a very perfect place to hang around with friends. And the most important thing is i always feel safe in Bandung like there is no bad people. No lie! I really - really love bandung. I hope this city will always fill with good things. (Your topic sentence is not clear.)

Thanks for posting, you do not have clear target reader for your post. You have to improve your topic sentence in each paragraph.